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Review:Erised says:
Oh my goodness! This was yet another chapter that was full of action and excitement, and it was a joy to read. I can't wait for your next update!!

Okay so first thing: PHEW! Xavier is okay for now! Good, because I want to see him and Camille get back together, haha. I liked Johanna's comment about them slipping back into old habits, because I forgot to mention in my last review that being engaged is a BIG deal. You don't just move past that easily. I just want them to get together, is that too much to ask? ;)

The rescue mission here with Johanna and Camille was really awesome and exciting! Like the rest of your action scenes it was well paced and tense, and left me on the edge of my seat wondering what was going to happen next. I was actually surprised that Jean managed to get caught because he seems like the kind of person who would be ruthless enough to kill the Nazis who captured him, but perhaps that's why they broke his wrist. Either way it was pretty damn amazing for him to say - "I don't understand," he croaks, "how with two girls like you around people still manage to tell tales of damsels in distress." - best line ever, because yay feminism! :P

Also I think you have a really good imagination for the way you invent new things such as the mountain elf in previous chapters and the language Polyjuice potion hybrid in this chapter. It's great to see such a natural way to find a magical way around these problems and it shows your true skill as a writer!

I feel like I'm a bit of a broken record at this point but you really are such a great writer. I have not seen a point in this entire story so far where you have not been on point with your description, your flow and your plot. You give the reader just enough information to satisfy us but also provide tiny little tidbits which hint towards a bigger plot and what is to come in the future, which I love.

So, I think that's enough gushing from me for now! As you can tell Val, I absolutely ADORE this story and I cannot wait to read the rest of it when you update. So get writing! ;)

Jenny :)

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