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Review:Erised says:
Ahhh the plot thickens even more!! I'm dying at that cliffhanger there (perhaps a poor choice of words there, don't die Xavier!) but I'm happy that I have another chapter to read so I won't be kept in suspense too long ;)

So there's a lot happening in this chapter! I loved that we got some more backstory to Camille and Xavier and why he had to break it off. At this point I don't think I could dislike Jean more. He seems to be causing all the trouble here and broke these two up! (I know it was still Xavier's choice, but still :P) I do really hope that Camille and Xavier will work out their issues and get back together regardless of the consequences. I'm finding myself rooting for them now!

I'm also really intrigued by Astrid and this German officer! Do I sense some sort of romance or friendship between the two of them that will shake both of their beliefs, or she has to kill him or something? :P whatever happens, the introduction that you made for the two of them was really good and was very believable! I so find myself hoping that something will happen there.

As usual your writing is flawless and you have an excellent flow amongst all the components you squeeze into one chapter. Your descriptions were lovely here and I really felt as if I were there in all of the different settings with the characters. I could imagine everything really clearly which is a plus!

Also I've gotta talk about that ending. It was such a short scene but made such an impact! It was really well written and the imagery was really good here, and it didn't feel too rushed either. It was exciting and fast-paced, and is a credit to the chapter!

Overall this was pretty freaking awesome. Onto the next chapter...

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