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Review:LumosWeasley says:
Hello, this is LumosWeasley with your requested review :)

This is truly an amazing story, I never would have guessed that it is your first attempt at angst. It's extremely believeable.

You brought Myrtle to life! I never thought of her as anything more than the whiny ghost who had a sweet spot for Harry, but you have added so much more depth and description to her. For that I applaud you :)

I think the way you left out dialogue, intentionally or not, really helped the story. It didn't break up the description and leaves a feeling of being in Myrtle's head.

One thing I did notice was that in the third from the last paragraph, the line "ripped my beting heart" should be 'beating'.

I think the quote was incorporated brilliantly. I love The Casual Vacancy and it was nice to see the connection.

One of my favorite lines was the very last because it was almost abrupt, leaving a feeling on the reader that was really deep.

Great story!

Lumos

Author's Response: Hi there, LW :)

Wow? You really think so? Thank you :) Well, it really is my first time.

To be honest, I never thought of her much while reading the books. But when I was given the quote, the idea of using Myrtle's voice just popped into my head :)

It was intentional. I intended to write something that was heavy on the description. And I'm glad I got it right :) Thanks!

Oh gosh :( I know I have some typos. I'll get around to editing them soon :)

Wow. Thank you so much! :) this was a lovely review.


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