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Review:Illuminate says:
Hi! Ravenclaw Review Tag!

This is a really interesting story! I never have read about Lily in this point of view- as a woman who has always felt objectified and underappreciated as a person. She's always been a bright, happy woman in the stories that I've read, and while she also seems like that kind of person in this, I think you've really deepened her character and made her more complicated and dark. I don't think you've strayed from the canon at all! I think the best fanfiction strives to add to the canon rather than stray from it, which is what you've done :)

The prose doesn't feel clunky at all, it's very smooth and easy to read, the flow is great. I like that we don't see James or anyone else in this oneshot, this is wholly about Lily and when she finds out that little Harry is on his way.

Favourite bit- when you mentioned about fighting to stay still at her sister's wedding; I wouldn't want to let my sister marry that man either!

Great job!

Author's Response: Hey, thanks for stopping by!

It's great that you feel like this is still canon Lily, just with a darker twist. That's very comforting for me to hear :) I'm also glad that you liked how the plot was centered on Lily so that she could really be explored as an individual, apart from her roles as a wife and mother in canon.

Hah, I agree! I think it would have been tough and awkward for Lily, knowing that Petunia didn't even want her there after all that they did together as young sisters.

Thanks for your lovely review!

-Amanda


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