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Review:LumosWeasley says:
Hey, this is LumosWeasley with your review!

Your story is pretty interesting so far, I like how it talks about her first year and then jumps to fifth. One thing I thought about the first couple paragraphs was that they were a little confusing to read because they both had the word "I" in them frequently. I feel like the writing style gets a lot better as the chapter progresses.

I think you did Lily, Severus, James, and Sirius justice :) Their dialogue and characteristics seemed to be accurate, so kudos to you! I like the way James and Lily interacted.

One thing that stood out to me is that some of the dialogue and description reminded me of Harry's first day at Hogwarts:)

I'm pretty sure there weren't any grammar or spelling mistakes. This is a great story so far! Feel free to respond and re-request.

Author's Response: Hi there, thank you for your review! I'm so glad you like the story so far. I will read back over those first few paragraphs and see if I can make it clearer, thanks for pointing that out! And it's actually sixth year... so maybe I should clarify that as well :)

It's wonderful to hear that the portrayal of the canon characters was good, I do worry about that :p So thanks! And I really appreciate the review!


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