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Review:Erised says:
Ooh, the plot thickens!

Another great chapter here. I feel like although not a lot happened in terms of chronology, more happened with the character development and the relationships between the characters became more obvious. (As you can tell, my reviews mostly focus on characterisation, haha.)

The little flashback with Johanna was just so heartbreaking. I read that you had issues with keeping it in the TOS here, and I have had that problem before too so I know how you feel! I thought the watered-down version was just as good though, and it's very subtle in what it is implying. My heart goes out to her though, that's such a horrible position to be in. That last line of the flashback definitely made me shudder.

On the whole I actually would like to comment on how good you are at dealing with difficult situations in this story, which is clearly full of them. You manage to just hint at what's happened to the characters in their past and give us readers just enough information to work it out for ourselves, which is really nice.

Hmm, the bit between Camille and Jean about Astrid was very interesting as it said a lot about all of them in a very short space. I dislike Jean already and the fact that he wants to get with Astrid just makes him worse! Hopefully it isn't true. I LOVED Camille's parting line though, what an awesome thing to say. Stick it to the man! ;)

The mountain elf really intrigues me and sounds like a really cool magical creature. I'm wondering how it will act and what it will look like, but it sounds like a very powerful tool which would definitely be more exploited if it wasn't so rare. I'm looking forward to reading more about it!

The ending of this chapter was really quite chilling again - just those few excerpts of the file that Astrid reads and the fact that the Minister has no qualms whatsoever about taking away magic from people makes it sound like they're kind of the bad guys right now. I'm interested to see how that will play out and whether their consciences will get the better of them or not.

Onwards!

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