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Review:toomanycurls says:
I've always debated if Snape was really better than Lily at potions. Slughorn seemed to dote on Lily in a way that would suggest she was a star pupil. When Harry copied Snape's book for the first potion class, Slughorn mentioned that not even Snape had done as good a potion his first try. What I'm getting to is that I've wondered if the Advanced Potion Making book of Snape's had a collaborative effort with the notes in the margins. I've always thought they were at least equals when it came to potions.

It's interesting that she doesn't/think about know his family has a good amount of money. I like that it didn't influence their relationship. ^_^

I like how you wrote her trepidation about being pregnant. It's a very realistic look at young marriage and young motherhood (plus the war thing). I really like her complexity and depth. I haven't read a lot of Lily fics so seeing her so dark is fascinating. I really love the line about Snape pushing her boundaries too far once. It says so much and makes my mind want to know what he did.

I found the possession aspect to be very interesting. Two men did, quite literally, fight over her. It might be nice to have more detail about James being possessive. I did like the captive affection line; it said volumes.

I kind of feel like I rambled. I hope it was helpful! ^_^

Author's Response: Hey, thanks for coming by! And I don't mind rambling. Your review was indeed very helpful :)

I actually really like the idea of Severus and Lily collaborating on their potions work. It's kind of cool to think that they might have had some friendly competition (at least for a while) and could have discussed potions together casually in their free time. I still think of Charms as Lily's main forte because of the comment made about her wand, but obviously Slughorn did hold her in high esteem, particularly as a Muggleborn.

I like to think that money had little to do with James and Lily being together. I don't see her as the kind of girl to demand his assistance or really dwell a lot on the subject, though I can't imagine that James didn't offer to help her out from time to time before they were married.

Yay, I accomplished what I set out to accomplish with dark Lily! I really tried to capture her independent spirit and the complex feelings that she might have had around this time in her life, in the midst of a war designed to eradicate her "species." I also think that the real depth of her relationship with Snape is something that only the two of them--or possibly even her--will really understand, and I sort of love the beauty associated with that thought.

I was a bit afraid of being too cruel to James because he's sort of a golden boy to a lot of the fandom. I'm glad you liked the line about captive affection, though, because it's one of my favorites here.

Thanks so much for your lovely review!


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