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Review:Illuminate says:
Hi! Ravenclaw Review Tag!

I really like this oneshot!

Pansy is a character that is very unexplored and can give a lot of chance for a writer to deepen her character, especially as she seems such an unsavoury person in the original books. That's why I relish the chance to delve into a story about Pansy :)

I like your descriptions and prose- the way you connect her life and the way she feels to jagged, sharp edges really shows her character without coming right out and saying it. Showing that she wants to be a rebel and wants to reinvent herself and be rescued really shows the vulnerable side to her aswell.

One thing- you start three paragraphs with the word "She." Not that bad, but try changing it up a bit by swapping the wording around in the sentences.

Great job!

Author's Response: Hi there!

I'm glad you liked it as I had a lot of fun writing it. I know what you mean about her, as she always seemed so horrible in the books but I wanted to portray that other unknown side about her, and I'm glad you liked it.

I'm so glad that you liked how they interlinked as you're the first to pick up on it, so I was worried it hadn't worked! I never meant for her to come out so dark :P I saw what you meant and I've already changed it!

Thanks for the great review! ♥

-Kiana


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