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Review:FredWeasleyIsMyKing says:
Hiya - I thought I'd stop by your page from the review tag and when I realised I'd not reviewed your HC entry I couldn't help but stop by :)

Okay first things first. I don't ship Teddy and Dom. I'm totally a Teddy Vic shipper and generally something like this wouldn't be my cup of tea. However - I really loved it! I actually found myself wanting them to get together at the end. That my dear is very impressive on your part - you've really written the build up to this relationship well or I wouldn't have been able to face it!

Your imagery was really well done in this piece - I loved the part where she first found out where they were. The way you described the beach and the sea was lovely. I could really picture it.

Your characterisation was really good too - Teddy's awkwardness and Dom's self conciousness - especially when comparing herself to her sister - really sold it for me. And as I said earlier - the more I read the more I wanted them to get together.

The one bit of CC I may offer is personally I find it a little confusing when we change perspective between Teddy and Dom. I would have liked to see how you dealt with the story from just one o their perspectives - giving us the chance to understand how they're feeling. That's just my opinion though!

I didn't see any spelling or grammar mistakes so well done on amazing editing!

This is such a sweet little one shot and I loved how it played out. You incorperated the theme of travel really well and your descriptions of the place were great - have you been to that beach, or was it just somewhere you imagined? Either way - you shouldn't have been so negative in your AN, this story is great!

Lauren :)

Author's Response: Hi Lauren!

Thank you for reading and reviewing.

It's flattering to know that you're a Teddy/Vic shipper and yet you were rooting for Teddy/Dom by the end of this. I am glad you liked the build up!

I am pleased to hear you liked the imagery and beach descriptions. I tried my best to convey the picture I had in mind!

Yeah, I wrote Teddy and Dominique's characters in a way that would make them fit together so I am glad it worked.

Oh I actually wanted to present both their perspectives but I'll try and see what I can do to make it better =) Thanks for the CC.

No spelling and grammar mistakes? That's a relief xD

Thank you for all your kind words. It's great to know you liked this overall with the theme and descriptions. I have been to the beach I described, yeah =) It's a beautiful place! I am so happy to hear you found the story good. Thanks!

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