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Review:academica says:
Hey, here with another requested review!

I'll be honest--I'm not a huge fan of song-fics. I have no problem reviewing them for my thread, and I've written a couple, but I just find it hard to strike a good balance between flooding the story with lyrics and not hinting at them strongly enough to show the connection. I think you did a good job finding that balance; I can see how the lyrics inspired parts of the story without feeling like they interrupt the flow.

That said, I can't help but feel like there are some things missing in this story. If Luna "saw him once" and it was like a dream, how did she find him again? How did they end up engaged? It felt like you were going strong during the initial encounter in the main part of the story and then kind of left us hanging there at the end. I wish you had included more details about their reunion and how Luna and Ned interacted on their wedding day.

I did really love the first part of the story, though. You did a great job of working in Luna's quirkiness and showing how Ned was her soul mate. I liked how they handled the undoubtedly awkward scene where she borrowed his belt to attract a Niffler; it really showed that they were kindred spirits. I also liked your detail in describing the surroundings and everything Ned wanted to accomplish. I'm sure he never dreamed he'd get to marry the girl on the cover of the Quibbler :)

Great work! I hope this review is helpful :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hi Amanda, thanks for responding to my review request! Song fics are something I've generally avoided reading/writing until this one, I couldn't resist the Les Mis aspect of it! I'm glad you thought the lyrics didn't disrupt the flow, it was my main concern with this.

The Luna challenge I combined with had to include a wedding and a reflection on how Luna and my OC met so I tried to focus more on their first meeting than the rest of their relationship. I definitely see your point about including more details of their reunion and their interaction on the wedding though! I may revisit this and add more details of their relationship.

Luna's quirkiness was something I definitely wanted to get across in this, she's not an easy character to write so I'm thrilled you liked that part.

Thank you for the helpful and lovely review :)



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