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Review:adluvshp says:
Hi! Here for review tag =)

I enjoyed this chapter very much. It was nice to see Ellie interact with her friends and family. And btw, I am totally rooting for Albus/Ellie xP

I am curious about this Hat deal, and I wish we'd have known the song - though of course I understand why you didn't write it, that would be too difficult lol. The plot seems to be headed in a great direction, and I am interested to see what happens next - and what Regulus has to say!

The only CC I'd give you is that some sentences are a little long-winded so it would be better to use shorter and simpler sentences in future rather than long-winded and complex ones as they can disrupt the flow. But apart from that, this was pretty good.

This chapter was definitely well-written with good descriptions, no grammar errors, and a smooth flow. Ellie's characterisation is also developing which is great.

I hope to be back again for the next chapter when it's up!

Great job!
9/10
Cheers
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hello!

Thank you so much! Yes, I purposefully didn't write the song because rhyming is difficult for me, and with the added pressure that it has to make sense - lets not go there. Sometimes I wish I knew the song as well, but I kind of like the vagueness of it all.

Haha, yeah. Full stops - what are they, even? Thanks for the advice; I'll try and work on that.

Thanks for dropping in!


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