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Review:Lululuna says:
Hello again! :)

This was another great chapter, and so exciting! First of all, I love how of course Dom and Teddy take matters into their own hands to get a confession. It fit so well with their personalities in my opinion. It was great in this chapter to see Dominique recovering some of her feistiness and fighting spirit, and really stand up for herself by taking charge of this situation and getting justice.

As for Wilson Young, I found him to be a pitiable, if still despicable, character. I felt sorry for him in his state of desperation, and it made me curious to find out more about why he is the way he is. He is a newly turned werewolf himself, and trying to figure out how to cope with it, and I'd love to know more about that. Also, I was wondering what he did with the money Delilah paid him off with?

One suggestion I have is that Wilson overhearing Delilah's name seemed a little too simple. Also, would that be enough proof in a court, especially since she could argue someone had been impersonating her or something? Maybe he could describe Delilah to Dominique instead or something as well, or offer more concrete proof. Just a thought! :)

Another thing I found interesting about Wilson's offer to help Dom with her transition was how it really transformed her in my mind from "a girl with a werewolf bite" to a "girl who is going to turn into a wolf on the full moon." I think somehow I hadn't quite realized the extent of what being a werewolf really means, and that section put it into perspective and addressed Dom's future, not just her recent past and trauma.

Meeting Julia- who seems wonderful, by the way - helped remind me that Dom has a whole life and past outside of this incident, and made me want to learn more about her and what has shaped her into the person she is. It made me more curious to learn about her Hogwarts years, her other friends, and her place within the Weasley clan, among other things. Hearing her references to "Uncle Harry" were great as well, since there haven't been many appearances by the other Weasleys so far, besides Dom's immediate family.

I'm so curious to read what happens next and Dominique's big confrontation with Delilah! Somehow I'm worried things are going to be harder before they get better, and Delilah has some more tricks up her sleeve, but I guess I'll just have to wait and find out! :)

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.

I am pleased you liked this chapter as well. Yeah, I wanted Dominique to get out of her 'moping' zone for a little while and I am glad you enjoyed her fighting spirit along with Teddy =)

Wilson Young is a complex character. I haven't figured out myself how I feel towards him xP He is a person who has lost his way in life and doesn't know what to do anymore. He bought more alcohol with the money for sure! I was actually thinking of writing a one-shot about him... hmm we'll see.

Thanks for your suggestion, I'll think about it. As for the court, well he can easily recognise Delilah. But we'll see what happens!

Indeed, I wanted to show that the full moon is looming closer and Dominique will soon be turning into a wolf. I am glad the scene worked the way I wanted it to.

Julia is a nice person, a best friend that Dominique really needs right now. I am pleased it had you curious about Dom's life before the werewolf incident, I have her entire life mapped out in my head so maybe I could tell you all about it one day if we ever have the time, haha xP Indeed, the Weasley family hasn't made much of an appearance, there's only so much I can put into a short story after all, but I am glad you liked the "uncle harry" references.

Haha, Delilah is a manipulative person, but when struck suddenly, she may not be as smart. Well, we'll see what happens in the next chapter! I am glad you're liking the story!


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