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Review:CambAngst says:
Hi, Jen!

I really liked your take on Neville in this story. I don't typically think of him as a vengeful person, but his thoughts seemed very natural and believable in the way that you framed them here. I'm sure that life under Snape and the Carrows was pure torment during the year they ran the school, and Neville's personal history with Snape tends to get forgotten a bit in the broader conversation. Snape was a brutal bully to him long before the Dark Lord toppled the Ministry. Even after Neville found out about Snape's true loyalties, I could easily see why it would have been very hard for him to accept.

I really liked the imagery you created with the storm and Neville and Hannah's dingy little flat. It complimented his mood very well. I'm not sure whether this was on purpose, but the fact that they were packing to move seemed almost metaphorical to me. Here they are, about to transition to a new phase in their lives and Neville is stuck in the past. When he knocks the box over and finds the picture, that added to the effect. Everyone else, it seems, has moved past their hatred of Snape but Neville can't let go.

Your writing was lovely. Nothing seemed awkward or out of place. The story flowed really well and the pacing was just right. It wasn't a long read, but it didn't feel rushed, either. I couldn't find a single typo or grammatical problem, so kudos for great editing!

I think this is the first story of yours that I've read in a really long time. I forgot how talented you are. Nice job!

Author's Response: Hi Dan!

Thank you! I was a little unsure as to how people would receive this, but so far the response has been mostly good. My point with this story is that not everyone is perfect, and this is just one night in Neville's life where he is thinking badly about the past. It happens to everyone.

I'm so glad that you've understood what I was going for with this fic! I've always enjoyed writing from other forgotten perspectives during the HP timeline and the Neville/Snape drama really appealed to me as an untapped source of inspiration. I too agree that Neville would initially have had a hard time accepting that the man who belittled and bullied him since the age of 11 was actually on the 'good' side.

Thank you! It was indeed intentional. The storm created the pathetic fallacy for the setting, and the transition point in their lives contrasted with Neville's looking back on the past. I'm really glad you picked up on that!

You sweetie! I definitely don't do long reads so I'm pleased you thought it wasn't too short. And considering such a compliment is coming from you Dan I feel very honoured!

Thanks for taking the time to leave a review :)


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