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Review:nott theodore says:
Hi Amanda!

I'm here for review tag. I should tell you that I'm not normally a fan of AU stories, but this one has been highly recommended to me and your writing is always brilliant, so I wanted to give it a try!

I really like the concept of a story that explores the relationship between Muggles and wizards and one that's set against the backdrop of the first world war. Historical settings always interest me, and WW1 had such an enormous effect on the world in the last century that it's really interesting to view it from this perspective.

The use of imagery was great in this chapter. It was quite heavy, but since this is the opening chapter it didn't feel unbalanced at all. One of the great things here was that I still managed to build a picture in my mind of what was happening despite the fact there's little visual description. This chapter was one that utilised the other senses a lot more and it's not something I've seen done before, but I really liked it.

The style you used for the narrative here was extremely effective; I felt almost like I was pulled around with Cedric's thoughts and senses as I read and it helped me to place myself right there in the story. The chapter was quite disjointed, and almost jarring at times, but it reflected the sort of disorientation that Cedric is feeling at this point.

I really enjoyed the contrasts between the harsh realities of war and the warmer memories from home. They help to bring home the horror that went on everyday at this time, showing Cedric as a young boy who's joined up and is in way over his head. Since he's had to drop out of school to fight then he must be one of the thousands of boys who were sent out to face something they should never have had to. The way that he clings to the happy memories of home in his pain and distress really helps to bring those realities home.

I'm really interested in how you'll continue this story, especially with your background in psychology - I suspect there'll be some exploration of the psychological effects of war and the way that different people deal with it. Anyway, this was a great chapter and I'll be back to read more soon!

Sian :)

Author's Response: Hi Sian, thanks for stopping by!

I thought World War I would be a really interesting period to write about, especially with the addition of magic. Some of the weapons introduced during this conflict might have seemed like magic to people because they were so strange and deadly. I also just thought it was a great backdrop for a really classic love story.

I did try to focus on the other senses a lot because the chapter is sort of written from Cedric's limited perspective. I need to make a point to try to rely on more than visual imagery in my other stories because I got a lot of compliments about that part of this chapter. You really pinpointed my intention that the chapter's disjointed, confusing structure would mirror Cedric's uncertain feelings, too, so that makes me happy :)

I think a lot of wartime stories on HPFF seem to leave out the idea that these are just kids who probably wouldn't be totally mature and able to handle the harsh reality of war. I really tried to play up the idea that Cedric could be homesick and unsure about the future and grow a little bit after looking back on his eagerness for battle.

I do delve a little bit into the psychological effects of war in this story, though I guess it becomes more of a major theme in my upcoming novella. Hope you do come back soon to read more of this story!

Thanks so much for your kind review :)

-Amanda


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