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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey! Here for your requested review from the forums.

I quite liked this chapter. I think your writing is improving with each chapter which is great =)

I loved the new twist - of Sadie being Harry's cousin. The way you wrote the Weasleys and Harry was very believable which is a great feat since they have been written often in canon and it's not easy to portray them realistically. I liked the way Mr and Mrs. Weasley behaved, and how the others reacted to the news. Harry's thoughts were also quite believable and I am curious to see how the relationship between him and Sadie turn out.

The part of Sadie not being able to talk surprised me. I assumed in the previous chapter that she was scared and thus not talking, but apparently not. It is certainly an interesting twist, and I am excited to see how you have her interact with everyone in the story, and develop her character.

I don't have any CC to offer you since this was pretty good.

The descriptions and detail in this chapter were nicely done, not too little and not too much, and suited the scene. The characterisation of Harry, Ron, Hermione and the rest of the Weasleys is good. The dialogue and narrative is also pretty well-written. The chapter flowed smoothly and the pace of the story seems to be balanced. All in all, great work! I am very much interested to know what happens next so I might come back soon to read the next chapter - or you can surely re-request =)

Good job!
9/10
Cheers
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for coming back! And for the compliment. :)

I am so happy that everyone seems to be loving the twist that Sadie is Harry's cousin. I was very worried people were going to lump it into the cliche of Harry having a long-lost sibling or twin and not want to read it, but so far people seem to be quite excited by me, which makes me really happy.

Also nice to hear my canon characters are holding up. I have a lot of fun writing them, but I do worry because EVERYONE knows them so well - what if I can't pull them off right... Also comforting to hear it's working.

Sadie and Harry's relationship will be one of the central themes of this story, so you should get the chance to see lots of it.

I figured Sadie's lack of a voice would come as a surprise to most, but I kind of wanted it that way. Your comment shows me that the first two chapters worked exactly how I wanted, with people assuming she was just scared (which she really was, btw.) Her lack of speech is again, another central issue of this story. It has a huge impact on who she is as a person.

No CC! THAT is probably the best compliment ever! *blushes* Thank you!

And you're wanting to know what happens next! SWEET! I will stalk your review thread, but it's a happenin' place, hehehehe, so I'm not sure when I'll be able to grab another spot. Will surely keep trying though as I really want to see what you think as the story progresses.

Thanks so much!

- Farmgirl


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