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I was so excited to see that we get to meet Penelope here again. Her story seemed very interesting in the prologue and left me quite curious, so I am glad you are writing her story between Eileen's too, yay xD
I love how you have characterised Penelope. She comes across as a strong personality, grown up in a period where women are quite submissive and obedient, and I like the rebellious streak in her. You have really fleshed her out beautifully in just this one chapter which is amazing. I can already envision her and can connect with her =)
I liked the part about the letters, I think it was a nice way to give us information without making it seem like a crammed backstory in the chapter. I liked Alice too, I already got a feel of her personality, and I hope that we see her in future chapters as I'd like to meet her.
The way you showed Penelope's thought-process, both through the letter she wrote and the interaction she had with her parents later was nicely done. I am already sympathising with her and rooting for her 'freedom'! I am also curious to know what her plan is and how things are going turn out for her further. In short, I am enjoying her characterisation a lot, and am very interested in her plot-line!
Penelope's parents seem the typical pureblood type and I like how you executed their dialogues and such. It was all kind of formal-ish too which went well with the era. I also absolutely love the names you've given your characters, especially Alvina the house elf and Otwell the father xD
As for the curse, I am quite intrigued by what it would be and who would cast it, or if it's already in place. I think, since there seems to be so much emphasis on blood purity in the Prince family, it would be something along the lines of killing/destroying anyone in the Prince family who 'contaminates' the bloodline i.e. marries a non-pureblood. Or something like that? Of course, I may be completely wrong but what's the harm in guessing, hehe.
All in all, this was another wonderfully written chapter with awesome descriptions, and unique characters. I loved Penelope and I can't wait to read more of her story. I am enjoying the plot a lot and am very interested in what's going to happen next - in both Penelope's and Eileen's lives. The curse of course has me hooked as well.
I don't have any constructive criticism to offer you, this is pretty much flawless in my eyes really, and now I am going to favourite this lovely story, and come back when I have the time to read the further chapters too! Of course, you can re-request as well, but be sure that I'll be reading this story either way xD
Great job! 10/10
Author's Response: Hello Aditi! It's lovely to see you here again!
I'm glad you like seeing Penelope again. I wasn't originally going to do dual storylines because I wanted to focus solely on Eileen and Tobias, but I like what it has become. I think it is pretty good! :P
Penelope was difficult for me to characterize at first. I went back and forth, back and forth with here characterization (poor Jami-I thought she'd kill me because she beta'd this like four times).
The letters just seemed perfect and I'm happy I decided to include them. You will definitely meet Alice in future chapters. Probably 15? I'm not sure of the numbers, but it will be much further in. She's going to be fun to write!
I hope you continue to root for her as you continue to see her character unfold. She's wonderful on the outside, but, well, she's not exactly what she seems. I'm so stoked you like her storyline! The more I hear that, the more confident I become in my decision.
I love your educated guessing! Of course I can't give it away (as much as I want to tell you everything). I can say that you are too perceptive for your own good!
Thank you so much for the wonderful review (and the favorite!). I appreciate your feedback so much and really value your opinion about this story. Thank you so much again! ♥