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Review:patronus_charm says:
I really love how the reviews on this chapter jump up by a considerably amount due to the kissing scene :P

Wow, this chapter was certainly action packed though! I loved the mad drama at the beginning of it with all of them running like mad people for the bathroom. Clemence really is a character with the way she just started stripping so to save Albus being found. It does seem odd that she would do that. Obviously thereís the whole thing about finding out the girlfriend but still, it still was further than the normal journalist would go.

The best part had to be when Clemence started yelling at the gaggle of them as it had me cracking up a lot :p Another aspect which I really enjoy is Albus and Clemenceís dialogue and it was done perfectly here with the way they were jesting one another back and forth. Honest to Merlin, I really did not anticipate that the chapter would culminate in that. I thought that it was gone to end with either wands or fists drawn. Iím still unsure which ending I prefer.

Clemence was just brilliant with her antagonism of Albus! With those little movements and jabs it kept the tension and suspense up perfectly. I think it was flash for both Clemence and me because I really didnít expect Albus to be the forward one! That kissing scene was really well written, and gah, it just kept me gagging for me while reading it.

I loved how Dom came bursting in on them but Clemence still somehow managed to keep her cool. The final little notes about Albus at the end of the chapter were really great and Iím really curious to see how this affects their relationship. Another awesome chapter!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Bahaha, yes I've observed the snog-scene phenomenon quite a bit :D the view counts rocket up too.

Clemence only took off her jumper--so just outerwear! She's got all her clothes on, she just wanted to fake it to get rid of the girls :D I thought about what she'd do in the heat of the moment, and when it came down to it, she wasn't cruel enough to throw Albus to the mob. She was going to save herself anyway, so what's one more silly boy?

It originally wasn't going to end with a kissing scene. But I really wanted to write a kissing scene at the time and it became an unexpected blessing, because that's when Albus's character really started developing in my head. There's a lot of dynamics that don't get typically explored in rom-coms because there's often this massive build-up to the first kiss between the ~intended pairing~. Instead, I stick it in the sixth chapter with the rest of the story still to come xD It sets a different precedent for their future relationship, one that's waaay too fun to write.



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