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Review:MargaretLane says:
*cracks up* The chapter I am currently working on begins with a line about the amount of Quidditch practice Albus has as well. AND they're preparing to play Slytherin.

One thing, you've written "finally, on the second Saturday in February, was the day of the match". It should be either "finally, the second Saturday in February was the day of the match" or something like "finally, on the second Saturday in February, the match took place."

Love Albus' comment to Hagrid. You can really hear how he says it.

*cheers for Hufflepuff not booing* That sounds like them.

Louis's commentary is a little biased, isn't it? *laughs* If McGonagall was there, she'd have something to say.

Also love that little detail about the broom makers deliberately making the brooms so they need to be fixed professionally in order to make money.

*grins* I was expecting Gryffindor to win the match, though I was doubtful for a few moments when that Bludger came at Albus.

Oh, James says "we would OF won anyway," when it should be either "we would HAVE won" or "we WOULD'VE won."

I was waiting for something bad to happen, after they won the match. And of course, it's right at the end, just when everybody was happy. *laughs*

And yikes, she checked every single copy of the Daily Prophet? No wonder she was spending so much time in the library.

Author's Response: Some of the similarities between our stories is weird. Sometimes, you'd add something in one of your chapters that I'd be planning for one of mine.

You have a good eye! I'm impressed that you manage to catch things like that!

I think Hufflepuff is rooting for Gryffindor, so their cheering is for them, but they think it is rude to boo.

It is very true, that companies make sure they don't allow you to fix the things if they want you to send it back to be repaired. I've had stuff like that happen to me.

I got in the nasty habit when I was younger of saying "of" instead of "have". I didn't even notice until I started writing.

I didn't add in how much time Rose spent in the library, because Albus didn't know because he was at Quidditch so often. But on an average school day, Rose got up at 6:00 am to research in the library for a few hours. Then, during lunch, she would eat her food really quickly and then look in the library for a little bit. After classes, she would do her homework really quick (she writes very fast) and then go to the library for the rest of the afternoon and evening, leaving only a brief break for dinner. On weekends, she was there practically all day.

It's no wonder Art was getting concerned.

So yes, she was able to check all the Daily Prophets. Art and David helped too, but they like a little relaxation time, and they both like to sleep in.

Thanks for the review!







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