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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey! AditiDraco95 here with your requested review from the forums. Apologies for the delay.

I quite enjoyed this chapter. I liked the way you've portrayed Viktor. His thoughts seem believable. The little details about the changes in the Leaky Cauldron and Diagon Alley are also quite interesting. I liked how Viktor and Amy met. Amy's brothers and the reporter were annoying though, haha. The ending of this chapter is also very intriguing, the way both become friends and walk towards the Muggle world.

The only constructive criticism I will offer you is that perhaps you should try to describe more emotions and thoughts in the narrative. For instance, when Viktor meets Amy, it would be nice to know what's going on in his head a bit more - like what he thinks of her suddenly pouncing on him like that and later on becoming friends, rather than just one-line details and all dialogues. That would definitely make for a more engaging read.

Apart from that, this story seems to be headed in a nice direction. Your characters look good, the plot is interesting, the writing style nice, and grammar pretty much okay. Good work, and keep writing. Feel free to re-request!

8/10
Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hi there! :)
I'm glad you liked the plot and the characters. Plot is very important while writing humor so I'm happy to know it's good. =]
Yes, I agree with you. I really should describe Viktor's feelings a bit. While writing the chapter, I myself was confused what his feeling might be. So maybe now I'll think about it and edit the chapter out later.
Thanks for the lovely review! Will re-request.


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