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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey! Here for review tag!

This was certainly a very unique and interesting concept and I enjoyed it very much. I liked how you described Katie's confused feelings in the beginning then eased her into the evil person she became with the events that took place. The "epilogue" was quite shocking though fitting. Your writing style was nice as well, and the story flowed smoothly.

The only CC I'd give you is that perhaps you should have added a "line break" before the epilogue to make the formatting neater. Also, there were some grammar/spelling errors I spotted so perhaps this could do with a thorough re-read and then edit. I also wish you'd have included some more description and imagery as that would have made this all the more dramatic.

Nonetheless, your idea was very good and I like your characterisation. You certainly have loads of room for improvement so keep experimenting with your writing. Good job!

8/10
Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Yay I'm glad you liked it.

I wrote the story for a challenge and as it took a while to be validated I didn't have the time to go back and edit it before the deadline. Now that the challenge is over though I'll probably go in and touch it up and add some more detail.

Thanks for your input and thanks for the review.


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