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Review:BLONDEbehaviour says:
Hello hello, I'm back with your requested review :)

Yup, definitely hooked! Awesome chapter :)

I love that you have included Regulus! He is one of my favorite unspoken characters, and you portrayed him in a way that i feel would be very similar to what he would be like at that age- witty, cunning, very similar to Sirius but just more evil via his pureblood ways.

I also love how you have portrayed Ellie in this scene, she definitely has that teenage tinge to her thoughts and dialogue, you have done very well in that regard. She herself is very sarcastic and witty, and i find her unique as a character. Will be interesting to see where abouts Regulus comes into her life this year, and how he may help her instead of the other way around. I like that plot twist! I will also be interested into seeing how Ginny comes into this from giving her and Chris those watches, I'm sure there's more to happen there :)

I only saw one grammar snag (Yay!) "I mean, they all tell you that Death's great." I'm not sure if that needs a capital D on death, but whatever works!

Also one thing that you may want to look at if you are looking to keep characters canon, is Regulus' after-life use of muggle technology. Not that i'm not a fan of Dr Who (I have too many friends who are not to be) but i don't know if he would use them, even in death. He was very strict on his pureblood ways. But that's just my opinion! Its a good sequence that bit there, so either way it works :)

All in all, another great chapter! Bring them coming, it's growing into a cool story so far!

Blondie :)

Author's Response: Ahh! Thank you so much! You're too kind!

I've always wanted to write Regulus, and not as an angsty character, but just as a normal teenage dude, so I thought that this could be a good opportunity to do so.

Yeah, Ellie definitely is a teenager with her teenage moments, although she can seem a little wise beyond her years at times. I glad that you think she's funny - I wanted her to be funny, but without being over the top, if you get what I mean. And her relationship with Regulus is... interesting!

Of course - there will be more Ginny because the world needs more characters like her.

I capitalised death because in order to personify it a little, and make it an entity in its own way. Death's almost another character in this story.

I've actually been really torn about the way I've written Regulus in terms of him being modern instead of stuck in the past, but I think I've decided that's something that I want to explore with his character - how he reconciles these two aspects of himself. He's really not Ellie's typical ghost, that's for sure!

Thank you so much once again for this lovely review!


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