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Review:Lady of Tears says:
I am so sorry this review took so long! I'm going to try and read and review the other chapters to make up for it. But better late than never I guess!

I have to say you write very vividly, and I liked that. I felt super creeped out and got those chills on my spine, and I think that's a good thing for this opening you gave us. You talked about flow, and I think you did really well. The action was well connected. I would suggest breaking up very large paragraphs, as the larger they are, the harder it is to read.

The only thing I would suggest is what I would call a discrepancy between the Death Eaters and pureblood idealism.

For example, I couldn't see them letting a muggleborn sitting at the head of the table. I remember the floating teacher from the books. And while it wasn't as big of a problem, I found the use of chains interesting. I imagined much more magical forms of constraint and torture.

But outside of that, I think this is a compelling start. I'm glad I got to read it!

-Lady of Tears

Author's Response: Don't worry about it! I'm more than happy that you took the time to review!

I've tried to shorten my paragraphs in the other chapters so i have definitely taken that on board! And reading back now I do realize that I do need to make some changes as to how the death eaters did treat Imogen so I'll get working on that!

Thank you so much!


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