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Review:BLONDEbehaviour says:
Hello hello!

Wow, lots of information in this chapter!! Poor Jasmine, having to take this all in at an alarming rate, I'd hate to be in this position, it would be a very conflicting one! I would take it very similarly to her, maybe even worse!

When it comes to the information, i think you have done well n spacing it out. I feel like it is supposed to feel overwhelming, so we can get Jasmines perspective, but it is not too overwhelming for the reader to not be able to grasp it, so well done :)

My only snag with the way you have set it out, and i can see in your authors note that you have explained it somewhat, is the amount of dialogue in the chapter. I don't think it is too much of a problem myself, it works well, but i had trouble depicting who was speaking where, as it doesn't get identified often enough. Maybe by writing who was speaking, and what they were ding, looking uneasy, or grasping a chair or such, would jut help to identify which character is speaking where, and will also help to break up the dialogue just a bit for room to breathe between speakers. I hope that makes sense and doesn't come across as harsh, it's not meant to at all!

Apart from that, i like the chapter! I'm interested in seeing what happens to Jasmine next :) Feel free to re-request, like always :)

Blondie :D

Author's Response: Yay I'm so glad you like the chapter! I would be going crazy if I had to deal with what Jasmine is going through.

As for the dialogue you didn't come off harsh at all. I have a problem with separating dialogue (I'm trying to teach myself the enter button is my friend. Lol) and I currently obtained a beta so that will be fixed soon.

Thanks for the review :D


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