Firstly, I'm sorry I'm so slow with this review. I've been multi-tasking this morning and reading in snatches between cleaning and batches of baking.
But, more than that, I'm very much in awe and have been wondering how to review this!
This is an AMAZING story! I'm putting it in my favorites, and surely following it! (And probably reading the next chapter later today when I get time!) There are so many things about this that make me love it! I'll try to cover them all.
The moment I saw this was about the Pied Piper I had to read it. Just last week I was doing some research on the Pied Piper, believe it or not, and I was so intrigued by the history! The village that still keeps the legend of the missing children, the street where no music is allowed to be played, and all the many, many reasons scholars have put out there about what might have really happened. I couldn't help thinking, this would make a great Harry Potter story, and then, YOU DID IT!
I love your twist on things. The way you've taken the story, and parts of the legends, but moved it to Wizarding Britain and twisted it the way you want. It's so intriguing! And your grasp of the time period and customs is incredible!
I'm absolutely in love with your OCs. All of them so far. Marigold, Blind Johnny, Trip, Stephane. You have created characters that are vivid and alive in my mind, and I know from personal experience that is hard to do! Bravo!
And your language! Seriously, you are the goddess of description! Part of why it took me to long to read this is because I had to just sit and stare at passages for a while, admiring the beauty of them. I'd quote you my favorite ones, but then I'd just end up posting the whole fic back here. And the times when you address the reader directly - to some it might be jarring, but that is so in keeping with the style that stories were told long ago! How many Jane Austen or LM Montgomery books have a "dear reader" passage? Kudos for knowing your stuff!
Lastly, I really love this picture of the founders you've painted. I think I might actually like Stephane, and I adore Helga. Wanted to scoop up poor Helena and hug her.
Seriously, this was delicious and I can't wait to have time to come back for more. Thanks for such a beauty!
Author's Response: Hello there! No worries, I'm sorry for taking so long to reply to this incredible review! Really, you are just too kind to me!
I'm so happy you like this story and added it to your favourites! :) I was assigned the Pied Piper story for a challenge and was so pleased to receive it and play around with the original tale while fitting it into the HP world. That's a crazy coincidence that you were just researching it as well, and I hope I did the amazing story justice.
I'm very pleased to get feedback saying the story seems historically accurate, as I hoped to get at least a slight sense of the time period. Somehow Hamlin fit seamlessly into the world of the Founders and Britain as I pictured it. I really love the OCs here as well, and knowing that you found them as vivid and real as I do is really great to know! :D I love how you said you might actually like Stephane - he's an okay guy, deep down, and not quite as slippery as his father.
Thank you so much for your comments about the description and language! It makes me so thrilled and flattered, you have no idea. I put a lot of imagination into these passages so getting positive feedback is just lovely. I'm pleased you liked the addressing of the reader as well, but like you said it seemed to fit with the style. It also reminded me a little of the tradition of oral storytelling as well.
I know, poor Helena! :( Her story is so interesting to me, so I was excited to give her some attention in the story.
Thank you so much for leaving this gem of a review for me! It really means the world! :D