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Review:StellaRose says:
I really don't even know where to begin! I've taken notes on so many things but my overall reaction to this one-shot is 'Wow!' I'm so in awe of your writing and of this piece. Well done :)

I loved how you introduced Peter as the spy by having him confused by the 'stranger' in the bar. This really gave the reader a chance to see who he was associating with and help us understand why he was so paranoid and apprehensive.

Precision. I think that word very adequately sums up Snape as a Potions Master. It's clear you really looked into Snape's personality and found a reasoning behind one of his canon behaviors.

This quote was like a swift punch to my gut--'realizes in that moment that he feels nothing-no regret, no saddness, not even relief.' That line, to me, is really powerful. Even in the third JKR book, the Peter we are shown is not really remorseful. He is delusional that he HAD to do what he did in order to survive. Great job keeping his character consistent as he's such a complex study.

The only line in this entire piece, and my only real cc, is the last line 'It will not be until after Sirius is put in Azkaban that Peter sleeps through the night.' I understand that most readers KNOW what's going to happen but it still seems a bit out of place to me as no where else in the story do you show what happens in the future.

I really like the insight you gave when you said that Peter feels as though he's protected by Voldemort. It was very eerie to read the scene of all the Death Eaters before they found out what happened to Voldemort.

Your Snape was very interesting to read about as he was still in his first stages of grief. At times, it was a bit unbelievable due to his behavior in the books but I've come to the conclusion that he probably would have behaved the way he did right after Lily's death.

LOVE the ending, Snape's resolve and his final quote, 'No one can take care of him better than me.' It reminds me that even though Snape is a complete jerk in the books, he's always acting on behalf of another, Lily.

Sorry this is so long but I couldn't just focus on one particular thing for this piece. It's such a fascinating character study and I had a marvelous time reading AND reviewing it. :)

Author's Response: Hey, thanks so much for stopping by! I'm really proud of this one-shot and I'm very pleased to hear that you enjoyed it :)

Peter is interesting because his characterization can go in so many directions. It's easiest for me to really go raw and focus on his most negative qualities while also framing them in the light that he thought he was doing what was really necessary to ensure his own survival. As you pointed out, I tried to show the consequences of that, though Peter may not have anticipated them--his empty heart, his confusion and constant anxiety, and the false sense of hope he feels while living in Voldemort's seemingly protective shadow. I tried to make that final scene kind of eerie, given that we know what happens, and I'm glad it came across that way to you.

I get what you're saying about the future-oriented line. I'm really attached to it because I think it takes some power away from Peter and alludes to him being haunted by his actions for a long time, but I'll consider it again in the light of your comments, so thanks for that.

As for Snape, yeah, I like to think of him as a scientist, and with that comes a need to be precise. You're right that his grief is really fresh and his desperate actions are motivated by his concern for Lily. I'll be honest; it's easier for me to write him during times like these because I tend to be a little too sympathetic to him.

Thanks so much for your amazing review!

-Amanda


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