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Review:Pottergirl7 says:
Hey!
That was a very good chapter! The questions which are asked when the journalist (I think, or someone to that effect) is interviewing Rose are driving me crazy. "When Hogwarts closed." Wow, I want to see what happened to make it close! Even during the war when students were being tortured by teachers, it wasn't shut down.
I really do like the story and I look forward to each chapter eagerly. With regards to the chapter length, I think it would be better to have slightly shorter chapters because if they're too long then the reader loses interest and it becomes kind of boring (not that your story is). Also the way that you switch POV's a lot makes it a little confusing and affects the flow a little. I think again that's to do with the length but you just start getting into what Rose is doing and then you suddenly switch to Albus and then Scorpius and the Head. It makes it a little hard to follow what's going on.
There were a few little typo's but other than that, it was a really fantastic chapter and I love the last line; "Of course, he couldn't let that go." I love the way you write Albus, he's so sure of himself and arrogant, it makes me want to punch him just a little bit. He can't stand knowing that Rose knows something which he doesn't and without her it's possible he never will. He's far too curious and narcissistic for his good. And I love Rose, how she doesn't ever regret what she did for her brother but she regrets what the consequences were. And of course I love Scorp and Rose together. And I want to know who this Head is and what the deal with him is. He's a shady man.
Great chapter and I can't wait for the next one!
~Jess

Author's Response: Yes I understand what you mean by the shifts in POV and honestly, this wasn't my favorite chapter to write--particularly because it's so disjointed. And I'll try to keep the length shorter. Thanks for the constructive comments! I do appreciate them. And I love your analysis of the characters (I wholeheartedly agree that Albus needs to be punched, repeatedly, with great force). I love Rose too, because she tries so hard to make the best of a bad situation. The Head is a strange character, isn't he? ...hmmm ;)

And yes, The end of Hogwarts is coming up soon so you'll get to see how it happened.

Thanks so much for reviewing and sorry it took so long for me to reply! Come by again!


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