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Review:nott theodore says:
Congratulations Val! I can definitely say that you deserved both the Dobby and the Story of the Month with this beauty!

I'm so glad that we got to see what happened with Xavier, and that he seems to be alright. It was so tense at the beginning when Camille was calling Johanna for help and you wrote that section really well - I was so worried for him. It's great that both Camille and Johanna are strong and independent women who can sort problems out for themselves. It's brilliant to see characters like that in this time period. Like Jean says, they definitely aren't damsels in distress; if anything, they're rescuing the men here!

I liked the fact that Johanna knew what to do and was able to keep a calm head while Camille was getting worried. And she seems like the sort of friend Camille needs at the moment - she can see her feelings for Xavier and vice versa just like we can, but Camille still refuses to see it. It makes me ship them even more ♥

This may be me being completely obtuse, but is Xavier actually a wizard? I can't remember any mention of him using magic so far, and he seems to prefer using Muggle weapons... hmm, that may just be me being silly, though!

Haha I loved the fact that Camille automatically thinks the worst of Jean. I think you're showing that every single act of resistance puts them in more danger, and they've been lucky to survive this long without being killed. The plan that Camille and Johanna came up with to rescue Jean was a great one, and I especially liked the use of the potion to speak a different language - it's a clever invention, and I only wish I had access to it myself! It would make language learning a lot easier :P

The rescue was written really well. It was paced just right and there was this sense of urgency and tension as Johanna was going to rescue Jean. When they started questioning her I got worried she was going to be captured as well, so I'm really glad that they both got out!

I noticed just one typo towards the end of the story:
"Could take care of Jean's arm" - I think this should be "Could you take care"

This was a brilliant chapter, and I love this story. I know you only updated this yesterday or something, but I'm looking forward to the next chapter already!

Sian :)

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