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Review:academica says:
Hey Kiana! I saw your forum post and thought I'd come over and have a read of your new one-shot :)

I like your examination of Pansy a lot. Your portrayal is very bitter, which seems fitting for how Pansy would be after the war took away everyone she cared about. It's interesting how she thinks she's now in control, as exemplified by applying the makeup, but when she looks more closely she sees that she's become a mess, too.

I thought this line in particular was great: She likes that idea a lot -- it's a new role to play. It really shows that Pansy spent her life being what other people wanted her to be and she has trouble figuring out who she is now that she's been left alone and has no answers.

I liked the themes you portrayed in this piece: Pansy being a child, Pansy being a rebel, Pansy being jagged and frayed, Pansy being alone. I think this would be even better if you added a bit more just to tie all those themes together. Maybe the central theme is Pansy's continual seeking of roles. Clearly Pansy is more complex than everyone thinks, and I think it's cool that you explored that during this extremely low point in her life.

Good work!

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hi Amanda, thank you so much for coming over!

I'm glad you liked my examination of her because I was actually going to request review from you due to you having experience in psychology to see if it made sense. I thought she would be bitter because to fall so much and to have everything taken from her must have been hard, I'm glad you picked up on how she tried to control herself too.

Yes, I liked that one too! I always thought she must have been insecure from the way she acted in the books so it was a lot of fun to put more emphasis on it in here.

Now I realise it, I didn't do too much to pull them all together so I've already gone and edited in a couple more lines to hopefully pull all those pieces of Pansy together. I didn't realise how complex she was either, but then I think that's the case about most people and you only realise when you begin to analyse deeply.

Thanks for this great review, Amanda, it was really helpful!

-Kiana


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