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Review:LilyEPotter says:
Back again for another review!

Again the storyline is flowing well and the characterizations are great!

The phrase "Harry saw everyone around him dug into it," doesn't flow very well. Perhaps "Harry watched everyone..." or "...him dig into it," would help the flow a little bit.

In the sentence "Were all curious in knowing where and what you have been doing for the past year." You might consider "We're all" instead of "Were all".

For "Harry began to tell them about his meeting's with Dumbledore", perhaps "meetings" instead?

I noticed "scrared" instead of "scared".

I couldn't even begin to imagine what it must have been like to recount what they had gone through the past ten months after having lived it.

Having them debrief their actions before getting a checkup seems wrong, but it also seems to be that way in the books too.

Good job!

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