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Review:nott theodore says:
Hi again!

I'm only on the second chapter and I'm already falling in love with this story and your characters, which is a serious achievement! I love the authenticity of it with all the details that you work into your writing, and the way that you use enough French to remind us that the story is set in France - and it makes me feel good since I understand it without the translations! :P

I'm so intrigued by Jean's character - I felt like we got to know more about him in this chapter, although I'm not entirely sure that I like his character. He's quite cold and cruel; a lot more detached than the rest of the group. Has he known the others for as long as they've known each other? His opinion of his uncle is really intriguing. He doesn't seem at all bothered by the fact that his own uncle has to be killed - in fact, he's tried to kill him already himself. I want to know how that happened and what it is that's happened in the family before to cause that.

I think the sections with Simon are probably my favourites at the moment. They're very easy to get wrong if you don't write them properly, but you handle them sensitively and make them really touching to read. It was so moving when he got to see his sisters and talk to them, and I like his determination to remain unbroken before his captors. I really hope that he does manage it! The details about the marks were really interesting as well. I didn't know anything about them before I read this and it was great to see the way that you incorporated them into the story.

I loved the back story with Camille and Xavier. Seeing that there's a past between these characters adds a lot of depth to them. And after reading that flashback, I may now be shipping them... There was a mention of Johanna in that flashback too, which leads me to think that most of them have been friends for a while, before the war started. But the two of them were so sweet, and the French at that point was used perfectly. I know the vous form isn't usually used, so to me it seemed like a bit of a joke between them, almost ironic... I might be reading too much into that though!

Jean's definitely the leader of this group, and I think that's clear from the group dynamics and the conversation between them. I'm still intrigued about why he's so determined to kill his uncle. This potion is an interesting idea, and it seems like they've obviously had to carry out these sorts of missions before, since they're all so prepared to kill someone should they need to. And apparently they're taking their orders from the French Ministry? That makes the possibility of wizards working on the other side of the war even more interesting.

Another brilliant chapter, and I'm reading on straight away!

Sian :)

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