Hello dear! :)
I really, really loved this chapter, and how the story is progressing so naturally along the timeline of the Hogwarts school year. I'm sure I've said this in previous reviews, but I appreciate how the story concentrates on little details, like meals and getting ready to leave for the holidays, which even the HP books have been known to gloss over. The Christmas holidays are really a chance to give the reader a break from the constant narrative of life at Hogwarts and get to know the characters outside of the school setting, and you've set that up very well here, even with images as simple yet lovely as Brienne carefully packing her things, or Angelina being tired and grumbling at breakfast.
Ah, the kiss!!! I'd been wondering when one of those two silly kids was going to make a move, and the way it happened was so awkward and adorable. I love the relationship developing between Brienne and George, and it's very refreshing to read about, since so many HPFF relationships are founded on strange love/hate interactions. Bri and George are actually friends before lovers, and I feel like even if they lost their romantic connection their friendship would eventually survive, which is a real mark of the maturity and compatibility between them.
I don't blame Brienne for getting annoyed with the boys on the train, especially with how George acted so indifferent when we all know he likes her. Her frustration was definitely justifiable, and the boys' apology was quite cute and quirky as well. And looks like there might be some sparks between Paisley and Lee as well, hmm...
One thing I noticed which is more of a bone to pick with the whole Hogwarts-Express system is that if Hogwarts is in the Highlands, and students like Paisley live in Scotland, why are they taking the train all the way back to London when they live in the opposite direction?! Especially for Muggleborns -Paisley is one, right?- whose parents can't Apparate or Floo them back North easily. An option could be to give a reason for Paisley traveling to London- shopping, visiting family, etc.- but it was something I thought about! :)
Something I love about this story is Brienne's interactions and relationships with other people: like her friendships with Fred and Angelina, her romantic tension with George, and how she notices the differences between Fred and George which others might not pause to think about. The father-daughter relationship is great as well, and I'm excited to read more of it in future chapters, when you re-request! :D
Author's Response: Hi! :D Wow, what a nice present to find!
I really like writing about food so I like writing about the meals xD Just adds a little more detail, like you said.
I'm glad you liked the kiss, they had been working towards it for quite some time xD I'm also very glad you don't think Brienne was overreacting on the train- I do want readers to feel that her anger is justified.
That is a very good point about Paisley- I don't think there is any other way to collect students from Hogwarts unless they live in Hogsmeade. But yes, I will add a reason for her to be in London, cause I bet it would be a bit annoying for her to travel all the way back to Edinburgh xD Maybe she would get a plane?
I'm so glad you liked the chapter, thank you very much for the lovely review! :)