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Review:marauderfan says:
Hello Dee! I'm here with your requested review!

Aww! I really liked this :) I just LOVE Luna, and she is such a tricky one to write but I think you've done wonderfully here! The interactions between Ned and Luna were great - he's clearly star-struck and it's adorable. And I liked that they both just happened to be searching for magical creatures in the forest, what a perfect way for them to meet. I laughed out loud when Luna took his belt, she really has no boundaries haha.

The end was cute. They didn't find the Crumple-horned Snorkack but they found each other. (Everybody say "Awww!") :P

I've never written a song fic either so I'm not sure if there's a really specific format you're supposed to follow, but I thought the song integrated really nicely! You put the song lines in just the right place in the story and it fit really well with what was happening in the narrative. Perfect choice. (great song too, I love Les Mis.)

There was one sentence that didn't flow very well: The sound of the zip on the khaki green bag being opened disturbing the birds who were perched in the tree behind her and they flew from the tree, some squawking though indignant at the disruption.
It's a bit run-on and the verb tense in the beginning seems weird. Maybe you could re-word it to something like, "The sound of opening the zip on the khaki green bag disturbed the birds that were perched in the tree behind her, and they flew from the tree, some squawking as though indignant with the disruption." Or something.

Btw, good luck in the challenges! Though I'm competing against you in one of them haha! Maybe I'll request a review from you on mine too once it gets validated :P Anyway, great job with this story!

Author's Response: Hi Kristin! I'm super sorry its taken a little while to respond to this, I can respond to shorter reviews on my phone but I prefer to answer longer ones on my laptop which has been broken! Anyway, sorry for the life story!

Luna is my favourite character so I really worried about posting this in case I'd written her all wrong, I'm thrilled you think otherwise :D Ned was such a fun character to write too, essentially a male Luna which is always a good thing.

I'm really glad you liked the lyric placement too, I read a couple song fics before I started this and they were all different so I just made it up haha. Les Mis is amazing, I couldn't resist the challenge.

That sentence is all wrong, I totally agree! I'll change it ASAP, thank you!

Thanks so much for the lovely review, if you're competing in one of the challenges I have NO chance but this was fun to write regardless :D PM me on the forums when your entry is up and I'll review it :)


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