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Review:marauderfan says:
Ahhh yayayyayay (that's me getting out my excitement that you've updated!)

EEE TIME TRAVEL? Did the sandstorm send her back in time, like some weird quality of the sand? Omg does the city only exist in the past and whenever anyone gets close they get sucked into the past when the city existed? I clearly watch/read way too much sci-fi but this is just so exciting. Seriously, I'm going to be obsessively checking to see when you update next.

Also, I still am worried about what happened to Scorpius from the last chapter so now there's that cliff hanger still cliff-hanging, and then this new problem crops up.. AGH! ahsdkjs

Sorry this review is really incoherent. But we've gotten to the point in the story now where everything is exciting all the time and I love it. I really appreciate the addition of Muggle history like the discovery of King Tut's tomb - cool!

Now that I've finished my mad fangirling, there were a couple of sentences that had grammar weirdness, so I thought I'd bring them to your attention. This sentence is a bit run-on: She hadn't been as lucky as Rose and didn't seem to have a friend who had a potion which combated the effects of sunburn as her face was lined with wrinkles, and in the bits which weren't burnt to a crisp, freckles and moles had developed there.
The first part of the sentence is kind of awkward. You could maybe try something like "She hadn't been as lucky as Rose and didn't seem to have access to a sunblock potion, as her face was lined with wrinkles..etc."

Also, here it turns into first-person: Edward and David gave me a little smile before hurrying out of the room. (should say Rose.)

That aside, this is suuuch an exciting chapter and I really am waiting on the edge of my seat for the next one. You're great at the suspense haha. Great work on this and I'm sorry my review sounds like the effects of 82 cups of coffee.

Author's Response: Yay, I'm so glad that you were excited, I was so worried people wouldn't be given it's taken me yonks to update!

I can neither confirm nor deny any of those theories, all I will say is that you will find out more in the next chapter when we revisit Scorpius and co. though it will take Rose a lot longer to figure it out! I hope the next chapter will be up a lot sooner, so it shouldn't be too long to wait. :D

I can't say anything about Scorpius other than that you probably should be worried. :P I feel mean, but it will be a lot clearer in the next chapter!

I know, I was like this when writing and updating this. This is when everything begins to fall apart and whether they can piece it back together or not is the big question! I'm glad you liked the history it should feature more from now.

Ooh thank you so much for pointing that out! I think I got too exciting with the whole finally updating thing and didn't do a proper check. I'm so embarrassed about that first person slip-up it will be rectified straight away!

Haha, I loved your review it really made me laugh! I will definitely be quicker with the next chapter! Thank you for making my day with this! ♥

-Kiana


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