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Review:blackballet says:
Hello there! I am here with the promised review from my challenge.

I think this is a good start, but I have a few things to say about it. I don't mind your POV switches, and I even use them in my own stories; it's just, I don't think it's necessary to underline everything. It seems to take away from the story and is a bit distracting. Also, in the part with the flashback, instead of using 'start of flashback' and 'end of flashback' you might consider using linebreaks which are found in the editing box on here. They are much cleaner. Some of your paragraphs, especially the one about her family, are too long. Try cutting them up a bit to make it more readable.

Other than all that, I'm really happily surprised with this. I knew Hannah would be a hard one, but you've done so well so far with the plot. I really do like it a lot, and I think you've used everyone's paranoia towards the Slytherins very well. It even seems like a Hufflepuff thing for her to be so accepting of Blaise.

Considering everything I've said, I think this is really great so far. I hope to read more of it in the future.

blackballet
P.S. I would watch out with the overuse of capitals for screaming. Try using more description instead. It will make you a more professional writer and your story will read much better. :)

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! I'll take everything you've said into writing this story and other stories I'll write in the future. I'm glad you liked the story overall, and thanks for all the tips! :)

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