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Review:Debra20 says:
I iz back!!

Okai, so I usually offer my thoughts/feelings on the chapter I read of a story in chronological order, in tune with the events unfolding in the chapter but today is not one of those days. Today, I am bursting to say "OMG OMG OMG WHO IS WHAT WOMAN???" I am literally sitting here, biting my nails and jumping up and down in my chair from the excitement. I haven't been this excited about a fictional villain since HP and A Song of Ice and Fire! Especially since I have a haunch that Madam Tenebra is a canon character. I might be wrong, but when you described the moonlight highlighting her features, I immediately imagined Narcissa Malfoy. The gasp I let out almost woke up my family haha

Ok, so now that that's out of the way, I can make more sense of this review. Chapter by chapter, I am more and more appreciative of they way you're pulling Harry off. People don't list him as a difficult character to write because he's central to the canon books, but sometimes, that exact fact is what makes him not so easy to tackle. I think you're doing him a great justice. He still retains much of his adolescent feel, and his mature allure fits right into place with how I imagine him to be as a grown up. I love your Harry!

Just so you know, I am afraid to read the next chapter. I haven't read the preview of it from the description (I never read in advance), but since the plan Madam Tenebra and Flint created is ready to be taken out, I am sure it will happen next chapter. And I am afraid of what it's going to mean for Draco and Astoria! This may be silly, but I have a hard time distinguishing from Draco/Astoria here and Draco/Astoria from Detox. In my mind, the way you've made them work together in Detox is canon for all your stories and I am really, really scared about what's gonna happen to them here, in CoB. Not to mention if someone else is home with them at the same moment (I am thinking about Scorpius here). I just...gah! Your story is not an easy read when it comes to feels!!

I will not even mention Hermione, because only the thought of her and what she will most probably have to face is enough to reduce me to tears.

Also, I am looking forward to the Weasley family reunion! It's bound to be a fun moment, all that family reunited *swoon*

Author's Response: Hi, there! Sorry for Ral and I ribbing you a little about the mystery woman, but it's so much fun! Who is she? Well, it really wouldn't be much fun if I told you, would it?

I am relieved and overjoyed that you like the way Harry comes off in this. Out of all the characters, he's the one that I spent to most time on, obsessing over his thoughts and dialog and reactions. It is really tricky to preserve the things that make Harry who he is while aging the character realistically. So happy that it works for you!

The next chapter has some bumpy stretches for our heroes, as you know already. I don't think it's silly at all that you have a hard time keeping Draco and Astoria straight between the two stories. In fact, I was hoping it would work out that way. The Draco and Astoria you see in Detox are meant to be younger versions of the characters you see in this story. Marked, Detox and CoB show Draco at three different stages of his life, all very enjoyable to write.

Hermione has tough times ahead, but she's strong. Hopefully, she'll surprise you with her resilience. :)

Wow, you are moving right along. Thanks so much for stopping to share your thoughts and reactions!

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