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Review:CambAngst says:
Hello, again! Back for some more.

I love Lorraine! She has this frenetic energy about her, like somebody you want to videotape and then play her back in slow motion to see if she's easier to follow. There's something really amusing about seeing a witch who's terrified about having to deal with a muggle. The balance of power in that situation is so unequal, which makes it really clear how seriously the wizarding community took the Statute of Secrecy in this time.

Eileen is so cool and confident in her dealings with Tobias. It's obvious that she's been there many times before, and her command of the situation and the tactics she uses to make the customer feel like he's getting a good deal on the mending show that she's nobody to be underestimated. As well as she deals with the business end of his visit, she doesn't handle his presence quite as well. I loved your physical description of the man. He doesn't seem handsome in the classic sense, but his height and his eyes obviously have an effect on Eileen. One that she's not quite prepared to deal with. I really like the contrasts you're building into her character. They make it so interesting to try to understand her and predict how she's going to react in any given situation.

The feast you described at Hannah and Liam's house was fit for a flock of Weasleys! I loved the descriptiveness and the way you captured the scope of the spread that Hannah and Liam laid out for their guests. For some reason, I kept thinking about the end of A Christmas Carol. It only needed one of the kids to say, "God bless us every one!"

Tobias came across as awkward and quiet. Tall, dark and not exactly handsome. ;) There's a definite air of mystery about him. He seems to let his guard down and share just a bit of himself when he wants to, but otherwise he's a man of few words and minimal expressions. I think it's a great start for the character. Eileen is so taken with his eyes that she seems to be missing a few warning signs about his emotional distance.

Lovely chapter! I hope I'll be able to get to the last two before the end of the month!

Author's Response: Hello Dan! So many reviews in a month! I'm flattered and just ecstatic, really.

Isn't Lorraine great? She reminds me of that one person we all know who is a bit manic and wild. She's endearing, I think. Haha, it makes me laugh. For a witch, she's somewhat dim when it comes to dealing with Muggles, no? You mention the Statute of Secrecy and you're right. It was, and is, so important - I always imagine the Salem witch trials on a grander scale and yet, so much worse.

That's something that I love about her characterization - she's so confident when it comes to her business. She's very smart, quite like her son. I hate that often times readers underestimate her. Eileen's not a weak woman by any means.

I'm glad you like his physical description. Most women are not beautiful in the traditional sense just like most men aren't handsome in the traditional sense. We all have certain attributes and that's what I wanted with both Eileen and Tobias. They're not going to be beauties. She is a study in contrasts - I'm glad you've noticed that. I think readers see that, but don't always pick up on what I'm doing. I think we're all studies in contrast (I am, at least) and I think that's important in a character.

It is fit for the Weasleys, isn't it? That's such a warming thought. It makes me happy. Oh, wouldn't that have been great! OMG, I didn't even think of that. That's so sweet!

I'm so happy you think he's a great character - right now I'm very proud of where I've taken his character and hope he continues to progress properly. He's interesting, for sure.

Thank you so much for the wonderful reviews! I really value your feedback and opinions! ♥

Shelby


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