Hahah, this story is brilliant Sian! I really loved reading it, it has a great pace and sense of excitement to it, and the kind of hilarity only chaos can produce! I found it thoroughly entertaining and engaging, and I thought all of your characters were described really well :)
I loved the way you made Fudge quite muddled, and his eagerness was portrayed really well. I loved the way you included his bowler hat, that's one of the most memorable and iconic things about Fudge, and his behaviour and language is all very fitting for this character. I thought it was really humorous the way you started this chapter off, with: "Cornelius Fudge’s office was a very serious place" and the repetition of the word 'serious.' It built a really unsettling atmosphere, and the knowledge that something was going to go wrong. And when it did, it was made even funnier by the build up and tension rising from the very start.
The use of the hints was cleverly wound in to the plot, and you had no idea which one was coming next! The trail of events that happened in his office were so absurd, and each person's reaction to each event was well put! I loved the way you introduced Ludo, Susan and Barty, as these very solemn, studious and serious people, that made even Fudge seem a bit flustered. The things that happened to them, they were totally unprepared for, and I enjoyed seeing these characters briefly come out of their shells and stop being serious!
The last line was brilliantly put -- all of the lines felt well put together, fluent, and really neat -- it left you feeling satisfied, and coming away feeling like the plot had really achieved something. The structure of the paragraphs helped it run really smoothly, and the range of sentences created this really easy rhythm to the one shot. It made quite a narrative piece of writing, and I really enjoyed the extra details and bits of information you slipped in here and there.
Overall, a really funny and incredible one shot, that I found truly awesome! It was totally unpredictable at times, and the events that happened were both humourous and creative!
Author's Response: Sophie! ♥
Haha when I saw those prompts I couldn't think of any possible way to make them serious (although you managed to prove me wrong!) so I decided to make this story as ridiculous as possible!
Haha Fudge takes himself so seriously that I had to bring him down a peg or two, but I wanted to build him up as this serious character first.
Those hints were so difficult to work into the plot! I'm glad you thought I worked them in well though. I enjoyed writing all the ridiculousness and thinking of what stupid thing could happen to these important and solemn characters next.
I'm happy you thought that the chapter felt well put together and flowed properly! Thank you for the lovely review, and I hope you enjoy the next chapter too!