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Review:AlexFan says:
I'm back! I'm gonna keep this short, sweet and to the point.

I think this is one of your best stories and your writing at its best. You've got enough description to set the scene and paint a picture in the reader's head but not enough that it would bore someone to death. The beginning was mostly description which isn't a bad thing and totally understandable because you have to set up the scene and the setting and such.

Your flow was great, as far as I could see there was nothing there to interrupt it and everything was easy to read. You didn't use any big words that I would've had to look up (as is sometimes the case) which is also a plus in my book.

I think this was the most interesting chapter so far because we find out who is responsible for everything. I like that you didn't drag the chapter on longer than it needed to be and got straight to the point.

You've definitely captured the reader's attention and left them wanting to read more. I look forward to seeing how the problem is solved as the story goes on.

Well done!

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

I'm blushing! Thank you! I did enjoy writing this mystery and want to write more mysteries. They're pretty fun to write!

I might be overly concerned about the balance of description/dialogue mainly because I once read a book where the first 20 or so pages described a forest almost literally tree by tree. Needless to say, once I finished that book report, I never picked that book up again. :I

I will think about how best to continue the story. I've got an idea in my head that I'll work on.

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!


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