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Review:CambAngst says:
Hello, hello! People rant and rave so much about this story. I really needed to come see what all the fuss was about. And now I know!

We'll get the obvious point out of the way. Yes, teenage pregnancy stories are way overdone on HPFF. But I think you've made some really good choices that will set your story apart. For one, telling it from Louis's point of view. For another, I thought you had one of the most realistic takes I've ever read on the type of emotions that teenagers confront when they first find themselves in this situation. Until they've had some time to absorb it all and possibly talk to a trusted confidant, it's just mind-numbing terror. Several times, Louis thinks about how they've ruined their lives, and that's exactly how I think the situation would feel to kids in their position. This "Papa Don't Preach" absolutism that I've seen in so many other fics never made much sense. From Louis and Freya's point of view, life as they know it is over and there's a wall in front of them that they can't possibly see over.

Your characterization of Louis, at least so far, feels really good. Also -- and this is no small thing -- it feels like you're delivering the key information about everyone's back story at a really nice, organic pace. At the start of a long story, I always cringe when the author backs up the proverbial "Back Story Dump Truck" and unloads a mountain of name, rank and serial number-type information. I found out exactly what I needed to know in this chapter to get my head around the rudiments of the plot and to want to read more. I can wait a chapter or two to find out what houses Louis and Freya are in, what Victoire and Dominique are doing with their lives and who Louis's favorite cousin is.

Great start! I'll be back, sooner rather than later if I'm lucky. :)

Author's Response: I must admit that I was at first a bit terrified that you reviewed me, I feel like my story is not worthy of a fantastic review from you a fantastic reviewer! But then I got really excited that you had heard about my story because people were ranting and raving. I must thank these people! :P

I think that they are overdone too, but I wanted to try my hand at them, try to get the cliche out of the way and try to make it as believable as I could. Wow, thank you so much for saying that you think it's the most realistic takes you've seen on emotions.
I always imagined that they would be terrified instead of, "Oh, there's a baby. That's cool let's live in a land of happiness!" I wanted there to be consequences.

Awww You are so amazing with your wonderful words! I am smiling from ear to ear and you've made my whole life! I'm glad that you think that, I was so worried that I didn't put enough in this chapter to get anything about the characters across, so to hear that I did is amazing. :D

You are so amazing! I love you so much for reading and reviewing my story! Even for just reading. :D I'm starstruck!!! :D

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