|Review:||Violet Gryfindor says:|
Well, it looks like James is more on top of things that Augusta gives him credit for, haha. She's definitely in for it if the rumour mill gets a hold of her, and I can just imagine the capers that will ensue as a result. There needs to be a rule about stories being too much fun to read because now my face hurts from ginning so widely the whole time I read this chapter. It's way too much fun to hear Augusta digging herself into the biggest verbal messes possible. I love how she keeps talking about how hopeless James is when she's often just as bad as he is. The whole lobotomy speech... I can't even think about it without laughing. Brilliantly done, Gubby!
This is one of the rare stories that needs to be written in first person for it to work so well. Much of it relies on Augusta's own brand of insanity, and you make the first person voice highly effective too, such as at the end, when Augusta's mortification sets in. I enjoy her digressions - which are all of just the right length, revealing fantastic things about both James, herself, and the world of Hogwarts at the time (I especially liked the talent show with the image of the cello spitting fireworks - perfect perfection right there). The style is just fantastic, both easy to read and engaging, with many, many laugh-out-loud moments.
That's all the rambling I can manage for the moment. Needless to say I'm loving this story and hope that you're able to write more of it soon. Your writing is, as always, the best of the best.
Author's Response: You know how I love my occasionally unreliable narrators hehe. I love undermining them because mine, at least, tend to be very put-together but secretly aren't at all. And teehee I can promise that many, many capers will ensue (I can't use that phrase without thinking of Gina's Capers, so thanks for that, Gina). I'm so so so happy I can make you happy with this story, Susan! It makes me happy to write too -- and reread, actually, which is a huge deal. That lobotomy speech was a coup, I must admit. I was so afraid it would be too over the top but I'm glad it worked.
Yes, I agree; I think Augusta in anything but first-person wouldn't work nearly as well. Her brand of insanity depends on her assumptions of others' respective brands of insanity, and we'll see it when we meet more people, but she has a lot of assumptions, and she's wrong as many times as she's right. I was nervous about all the digressions too, because there weren't nearly as many in the first draft a year ago. I just love thinking up new things crazy fangirls do in pursuit of their One True Love.
That's plenty of rambling, and it didn't even feel like rambling because everything you say sounds like an eloquent, amazing critique. I'm so so happy you're enjoying it! I have a few chapters prewritten but I don't want to post them all at once because then I'll run out very soon, but rest assured, an update is on the books for the next few weeks! Thank you, thank you, thank you for being an angel!