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Review:ClaireAsh2617 says:
ClaireAsh2617 here with your requested review!

You started off mysterious - who is the speaker, why has she been taken? I like that! Makes the first chapter completely suspenseful and you show the story will be action-packed straight away!

You also show how rough the Death Eater's can be, which is in keeping with JK's aim, them not caring who they're hurting or anything like that. Bit dark already but very interesting, makes you want to know more about your main character and why they think she's important.

I like the reference to 13 people at the table, brings back the HP memories for us there!
Nice descriptions of people in there and the pain she feels, makes you really imagine what you are reading which is what all authors should be!
Ending it on a cliffhanger is a very good way to keep people reading!

Overall, the flow of the chapter is very good so no problems there. You did well with keeping it going. The only thing would be some spelling mistakes and capitalization others have mentioned so I won't bore you there! But it is a very good and entertaining first chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you for such a lovely lovely review! It completely made my day!

I tried very very hard to make the death eaters as malicious as possible and it sounds as if I did a good job so yay! haha, I'm very glad the flow of the chapter is good and the ending had just enough suspense.

I think maybe once I have written out more chapters I might go on the hunt for a BETA reader since spelling and capitalization are not my strong points haha,

Once again, thank you! :)

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