Wow! Where to start!
First of all, I really, really like how you used the change in tense to separate the past from the present in the story. Very clever! And it flowed so nicely, I almost didn't notice that you did it until we jumped back to the present tense at the end and I went, "oooh, clever!"
I have never read a story from Peter's POV. Actually, other than the books, I've never read a story with Peter in it. I'm not a huge Marauders fan, so I just don't venture that direction very often. I have to say, after reading this story, I'm actually quite torn and conflicted.
You see, I HAVE always wondered what made Peter do what he did - what makes anyone betray those they love. Most evil people don't start out that way - so how do they change? I really think you did an excellent job of showing how Peter got in over his head, how his thinking was warped and twisted, until he felt he had no choice - and also that he was fully aware of what he did and hated himself for it.
But, I also think it was extremely insightful of you to show that some of these tendencies had always existed in Peter as well. After all, he chose a rat as his animagus. Not that rats are inherently bad, but it's a rather telling choice. And the way you show him starting small - the justification for stealing, the sneaky nature, etc. It led him to a place he couldn't get out of. I couldn't help feeling sorry for Peter throughout this, even as I couldn't condone his choices either.
Which, is the point this fic has left me thinking about the most - choices. Just like Dumbledore said in the first book - it doesn't matter what tendencies we have, good or bad, but what choices we make and how we act on them. Even cowering, left-behind Peter could have made a different choice. It would have been difficult, and probably he would have died, but he could have done it. In the end, that's what set him apart from his friends.
So, yeah...thanks for writing a story that made me think so deeply tonight. Bravo to you and your writing skills. Everything flowed so very well and your powers of conveying emotions and descriptions were so strong I just got sucked right into the story. Nothing out of place caught me and dragged me back to reality, so that's why I think I was able to ponder it so deeply.
Well done! You are a wonderful author.
Author's Response: Eeep this review just njhaih;ifuawgjf. Your compliments have basically turned me into an incoherent puddle.
I'm so glad you liked the shifting tenses. I was initially worried that might be confusing with the time period hopping around several times, so I'm really happy to see that doesn't seem to be the case! And thanks so much for the compliments on my description, that was one of the things I worked on the most so that's really lovely to hear.
You said you felt sorry for him but couldn't condone his choices - and I am thrilled to hear that as it's precisely what I was going for when I wrote it. I really don't like Peter at all, but I felt there had to be some reason for why he did what he did. He was in a terrible situation and felt helpless, but at the end of the day he did indeed have a choice, and he chose Voldemort and power instead of loyalty to his friends. (I really like that Dumbledore quote from the first book, btw - it's very true!)
Thank you for such a wonderful review, it was so lovely! ♥♥♥♥