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Review:BookDinosaur says:
Hey... *cowers* Yes, I know I'm unforgivably late. I'm sorry!

So, I enjoyed this chapter, I really liked how you wrote the suspense and tension the Golden Trio are under. They're all acting really canon, which now I'm beginning to expect of you. I especially like how Ron immediately starts blaming Draco for the crime - it was a really nice touch and made him just that much more canon. And how he was becoming more paranoid and like Mad-Eye made me laugh. :)

Your spelling, punctuation and grammar were all fine in this chapter, it made everything flow well. The only thing I can say about your flow was that it was a bit rough at times, and your language was slightly formal when you didn't need it to be. For example, you say 'Hermione made no protest as Ron searched her office quickly, instead she waited semi-patiently just inside the doorway' when that could easily be 'instead waiting outside the doorway'. I think that slightly more informal language could improve the flow in the story. I hope I'm making sense here. :P

I loved Rita Skeeter's article, it was very her. You have a great knack for writing Rita Skeeter articles, I think. :)

And the cliffy at the end was really surprising. How could Hermione know who was the criminal?

Al in all, I really liked this chapter, and am going on to the next one now. :)

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

I liked that part in particular when Ron was blaming Draco just because he doesn't like him as well as how he has started acting like Mad-Eye. :)

I will go back through the story and see about improving the story flow more. Thank you for pointing it out.

It is a little bit of fun to write Rita Skeeter's articles.

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!


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