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Review:purplepotter77 says:
Ooh, I really like how this chapter starts off with Scorpius' perspective! Usually I hate it when authors switch point of views, but since this is in third person, it works really well here and gives a great insight onto Scorpius' view of things and his personality. A bookish, introverted Scorpius is one that I've very rarely seen in fanfic, and I love how his personality contrasts with Rose's outgoing, extroverted nature.

The details about the different characters are really lovely, too, such as Rose's fondness for cats and the way Dalila gets more withdrawn than usual while meeting new people.

Acanthus is finally introduced! I'm excited to see how the plot is moving, and I think you're doing it at a pretty good pace, too. The way Rashidi told the story of Acanthus was great, and it was a wonderful way to introduce the city into the story. I also love Rose's eagerness to go and find Acanthus and Scorpius' rationality and hesitation about it, which really shows both their personalities. I was wondering how Acanthus would tie in with the whole perfume feature thing, and you managed to include it in a way that really fit both of them together. Yet another thing I loved was how the grandfather is coming with them on the adventure, and I think he'll definitely make things more interesting!

I don't have much crit except for in this sentence "They were gathered in Dalila's cramped with living room with what appeared to be every living relation who lived close enough to come to dinner.", I think you mean "They were gathered in Dalila's cramped living room with what appeared...".

All in all, awesome chapter! I'm eager to read the next one!

Author's Response: I know I hate it at times too, but for the purpose with the story I need to have multiple perspectives. Yay I'm so glad I keep on defying your expectations with the characters as that's what I really wanted to do in this story!

I'm glad that you liked the little details because I often have more fun writing those than the actual story :P

Yes it is finally introduced, though them getting there may take a lot longer so sorry about that! I'm so glad that you liked the introduction to the city as it was so much fun to write! I feel so bad with you getting excited about them being together. As you've read the next chapter you can tell that they don't stay like that for long!

Thanks for pointing that out! Those silly typos always slip past! Also thanks again for another amazing review, I really didn't expect you to carry on reviewing so thanks so much! ♥

-Kiana


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