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Review:MadiMalfoy says:
Hey, here with your requested review! :)

Mega apologies for the tardiness, I just couldn't find the time to get more than one review done at a time and that time was scarce itself.

Well, I must say, this is off to a great start! I haven't had the chance to read many James II centralized fics, so this is a good one to start with. :) I think it's very interesting so far, what with your character Melody's sort of point of view. It lets us get to know her better before we actually get into the plot. And James! He's so different from canon, I love it! Not quite as prankster-y and more caring. Wonderful!

I think the dialogue flows nicely and adds more depth to all the characters and gives the descriptions context. You give them each their own persona and that's sometimes hard to do with dialogue. The words you use to describe how they're saying something helps to do that, so good job with that as well. :) Just a few grammar/spelling errors here and there that interrupt the flow a bit but a proofreading would clear those right up!

As a whole, a great first chapter, I can't wait to read more! Please, feel free to re-request for other stories, you write fantastically! :)
~MadiMalfoy x

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