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Review:UnluckyStar57 says:
Hi! I'm here again with another review for you. :)

As this story continues, I am still intrigued by the plot and the mystery that is Anaxandra. I'm very glad that you've kept it going, and I can't wait to learn more about her!

Her relationship with Draco is definitely going to take an odd turn now that he's essentially babysitting her. Hopefully she'll come around, and so will he. Astoria's personality seems a bit incongruent with Draco's, which is understandable, as the story is not going to be about his wonderful relationship with her. For their own sakes, I hope that things don't end TOO badly.

Yes, your tense was a bit inconsistent, but you can definitely go through and catch all of those slips. Just try to read the paragraphs aloud so that you can hear whether or not the tense makes sense in that context. (Ooooh, a rhyme!) :)

Very good third chapter! I always admire third chapters, because I have such trouble with them. Kudos to you!

May your pen never run out of ink!

~UnluckyStar57

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

Astoria is an interesting character for me to write considering she has kind of a "cliche" personality. You'll see what I mean later...

I've got a beta right now going over these for tense, and I think this one is still up for validation after it's been read through. Thank you for the advice, it is quite good!

And as always, thank you for the helpful review!


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