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Review:nott theodore says:
I'm finally all caught up! Yay, it's taken me a long time I know, but now I can read this story as you update it with new chapters! :D

I have to admit, I've been really excited to read the chapter from Terry's POV, and I really enjoyed reading it! I hope you'll think of writing from his perspective again, because it gave us a clearer insight into his mind and personality. I felt almost like he could be friends with Harry, since his opinions are a lot more concrete and decided, and there's something so good about him. I honestly don't blame Tor for falling for him!

The opening made me laugh, especially with Cho hiding from Professor Flitwick - it's another one of those aspects that helps to remind us these characters are still young. But obviously there was something much more serious going on at that point; I have a feeling that something has happened to Bentley's family and he's gone to visit them. It reminded me of what happened when Hannah Abbott got the news about her mother and rushed home.

Can I just say that the fact you've included the name Scamander makes me smile? I wonder if he's a brother of Rolf's?

It's interesting to view the events from a Ravenclaw perspective, and the way that Terry notices there is something happen with the Slytherins. I wonder if he'd have noticed if he hadn't been paying so much attention to Tor? It helped show that something that's so big to one group of people can also be completely insignificant to others.

I liked the moment when Terry was talking to Hermione and the fact that the pair of them had both chosen to study Muggle Studies as a reminder of the life they could have led if they hadn't received their Hogwarts letters. Hermione's definitely not the sort of person to take a subject for an easy qualification, and Terry doesn't seem to be either. It was nice to get to view the trio and other people in their year from a different perspective too, particularly when Ron and Hermione had fallen out.

Oh, Margaret Macauley's death was so sad! I guess she must have been the woman that Theo was forced to torture on New Year's Eve? I was wondering who it had been but really had no idea - it was sad to see that she's been taken as a victim of the war. I wonder if Terry will eventually tell Tor, and she'll begin to realise that someone who was helping her has been killed by those she calls friends and family? I thought you wrote Charity Burbage really well - her grief and sadness at the news. It reminded me that in less than a year she'll also be killed by the Death Eaters after being tortured by them...

Oh goodness, that attack! I was so worried, even though I knew that the boy couldn't die because it wouldn't fit with canon. I didn't know who would be behind it but when I saw Tor there I was so shocked. She says that she wasn't a part of it and even told on Demetria, so I do believe her at the moment, and it's nice that Terry did too. Perhaps witnessing the extent to which her classmates and friends are prepared to go will make her truly realise that what they've been taught to believe in is wrong; at the very least, she tried to stop them.

So, was Demetria the one to put the dead snake in Tor's bed? It seems she knows about Tor's secret, and I'm curious about how she found out, but it's definitely not a good thing that she knows about it! This could cause some serious problems for Tor, and I'm already worried about what's going to happen to her when she returns to the other Slytherins. She did tell on Demetria, after all... although she didn't tell on the others, and that might be enough to save her.

I honestly felt so sorry for Tor in this chapter - maybe even more so because it's not from her perspective. Everything here seems to escalate so quickly and she's put in such a difficult position. Now Terry knows that she's been hiding the truth that her father really is a Death Eater, and that's not going to be an easy thing for either of them to deal with, and I don't know whether they'll be able to continue with a relationship now... I hope Terry doesn't go off with someone like Leanne in reaction to it, although I have a sneaking suspicion that he will!

I really, really enjoyed this chapter. There was so much more that we learned seeing events from Terry's perspective; the way that he feels about Tor and spends so much time thinking about and looking for her. It was great to see his friends, as well. I like Michael and Anthony a lot - I don't think Anthony's going to tell anyone even though he knows about Terry's secret, because he seems a lot quieter and more reliable than Tor's friends. Having said that, you could decide to surprise us all and make Anthony a bad guy (please don't do that, please)!

I'M CAUGHT UP! And now I just have to say... update soon, please? :P

Sian :D

Author's Response: Hello again! :) Ah, as if you're all caught up and have left me an amazing review on EVERY CHAPTER OF THIS MONSTER! You are awesome my dear, and really hearing your reflections on these chapters helps me so much with planning and reader reactions.

I'm glad you liked Terry's POV since I really loved writing it! I think Tor does see him a certain way, and even slightly idealized, but this helped me get into his head and hopefully to show there's a lot more to his personality. I'm glad you like him, and understand why Tor likes him! :D

Haha, I'm glad you liked the Cho moment! I agree, they are silly teenagers when it comes right down to it, and have their moments of fun even when dark things are happening all around. You're right, there is something sad happening in Bentley's family, and so many Hogwarts students really are affected. In this chapter, Terry returns from his safe bubble of his Muggle family and notices even more the drastic effects of the Death Eaters, making him even less receptive to learning about Tor's father.

I'm pleased you liked Hermione's cameo and the references to the trio! It was nice to have Tor's world intersect with Harry's for a change, since they mostly exist in seperate spheres. I liked the idea of Hermione and Terry connecting through their Muggleborn identity, and enjoying learning about Muggles from the wizarding perspective- it's very Ravenclaw/Hermione of them! :P

I was sad to kill of Margaret, but it helped give a face to the woman who was tortured in my mind. I really like Burbage as a character, and the poor woman has no idea that in a year she'll be in the same situation as her friend. It's so cruel, but such is the nature of Voldy, and I hope Terry managed to give her a bit of comfort. :)

The attack was horrible to think about! I thought Terry would believe Tor, but the situation does make her look fishy to both sides. Even if she hid her reasons for stopping her friends under the guise of selfish reasons - like saying that they would get in trouble otherwise - Tor herself knows that she's changing, and Terry sees it as well. And yes, Tor's position has suddenly escalated, and Terry and the other Slytherins might start seeing her in a different way. Interesting predictions about what will happen... :)

As for the dead snake, I can't say exactly who put it there, but Demetria is certainly a sneaky lady! I hope to answer some of these questions in the following few chapters.

I'm so glad you liked this chapter, and getting to know Terry's friends as well. I loved writing them, and Terry's voice. Thank you thank you thank you, and I really hope I can update soon! Fingers crossed... :)

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