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Review:patronus_charm says:
Maggie! I'm sorry it's taken so long to get here! Gah, I can't believe we're down to the final chapters. I really hope that there is a sequel otherwise I will be very upset!

It's strange how I'm not surprised by Salazar's reaction. I always imagined him to be one of those people who bottle up their fury until it explodes much later on. I'm not really looking forward to seeing that moment though. I have to say, I really have enjoyed your characterisation of him in this story Maggie! It's been so refreshing as he's actually felt like a human to me here rather than a villain.

I really loved Godric's reaction to speaking to him though, he just seemed so in shock and it was so sweet! I've never really seen him so unsure about himself until now, but I guess a situation like this is one to make you feel like that. I really do hope that Helga comes out like that rather than in tears!

This line 'Do you know, Helga, when I first knew that I wanted you?' really gave me the chills! You really set the scene well with the way he was sitting and then when he said that I wanted to cry out to Helga to run because I knew something bad was going to happen!

I can sort of Salazar's point of view as strange as that sounds as telling her what happened to his parents must have been a hard thing, but couldn't he have been a little more understanding to Helga? I know you may be questioning my sanity by the last sentence but it is possible that he could have been a different man without it.

His dismal of Helga was perfect! In terms of writing of course, not from Helga's POV that would be mean :P He really seemed snake like there with the way he was so cool and in control of his emotions.

When Helga ran to Rowena and Godric I could really tell who the nice people were in the way they received her. It was just so lovely and different to Salazar's manner.

I really wanted to hug Helga then because she looked like she needed one desperately! I'm sure that Godric will sort of him out especially with the exit he just did there.

Another fabulous chapter, Maggie! &hearts:

-Kiana

Author's Response: Kiana! I'm finally here to respond to this wonderful review :) I'm so glad you came to review this chapter, because I've been dying for feedback on it!

You're spot on about Salazar. When I was forming him in my head (over a year ago...crazy!), I knew that he would suppress his anger in order to keep up this collected front. I also knew that he would be a deeply angry person and prone to fits of rage. At the time I wasn't sure which of those traits would play a more prominent role in this story, but now I'm glad I ended up being able to showcase both of them. I'm so glad to hear you've enjoyed him!

These last couple of chapters have been some of Godric's best moments, I think :) And oh goodness, that line! I wanted something ominous, and it's great to hear that it worked.

I was really hoping that Salazar's extreme reaction didn't come across as too melodramatic. I might have to re-evaluate some of that scene later, but I do think he'd have very strong feelings about Helga deceiving him about this of all issues. And I'm really happy that he brought a snake to mind for you. I've been playing with comparing each of the founders to their mascot animal in some way (though I haven't really found ways to use badger-like descriptions :D)

I loved writing that moment with the three of them, even though Helga is so sad there. It shows how close the Founders have become (and hopefully they can find a way to bring Salazar back into the fold.)

A sequel is forming in my head at the moment, so it's coming! Thanks again for a wonderful review, Kiana! *hugs*

--Maggie


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