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Review:Pottergirl7 says:
Hi Pottergirl7 here with your requested review!
Well let me just start off by saying that I think this first chapter was great. I loved the backstory and it didn't feel like you were trying to cram a lot into the first chapter.
I liked your characterization of Dominique, how although she was terrified of the werewolves and she didn't like the storm, her journalistic instinct made her go back for her notebook.
It seemed that you emphasised how perfect her life was and how inconvinient it would be to be bitten and then she is. I think how she copes and adjust is going to be very interesting. Also I'm curious to find out why she couldn't apparate?
Constructive criticism wise, there isn't really much to pick on aside from the odd typo (like one, I'm just being picky) and the whole thing which stood out to me was: 'Something had horribly gone wrong.' To me, that doesn't sound quite right, I think I wouldve said: 'Something had gone horribly wrong." It was only as I was looking back over that I noticed it though.
Overall for a first chapter, it was very good. We got a feel for our main character, it flowed nicely and you left us with a horrible cliffhanger! I shall definitely be reading the rest of this!
I hope I managed to help in some way and please feel free to request the next chapter in my thread!
(I apologize for any mistakes, spelling, grammar or otherwise, I'm on my phone.)

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing.

I am pleased you enjoyed this first chapter and liked the backstory.
It's good to know that you liked my characterisation of Dom from her fear to her journalistic nature.
Yes, this story is all about her adjusting - and finding out why she couldn't apparate ;) I love me some suspense xD
Thanks for pointing out that typo. I'll work on it.
I am pleased you liked this first chapter, and I am happy you'd like to read the rest. I'll surely re-request!

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