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Review:marauderfan says:
Hi AD! Here with your requested review! :)

You've done a lovely job with this chapter. I really like the way you convey all of Dom's complex emotions, from confusion to fear to disgust. I think her reactions are quite realistic for someone who's just found out she's a werewolf. I felt so badly for her - I wanted to give her a hug, though I know she wouldn't have liked it lol.

It's also really great that you brought up Remus's transformation in PoA, and how that's essentially the first thing Dom thought of when she realised the truth of what had happened to her. Of course it must be easier to be a werewolf in this time period, when Wolfsbane is more easily available and there are perhaps other things to help as well, but there is always the dangerous, animal side of the werewolf and that's all she can think about at the moment.

I was quite surprised that her family ran out on her! I was expecting them to stick around, but then all three of them left the room. Maybe because they knew what Dom is like and knew she'd want to be alone, but... it just surprised me is all.

So, I am really excited to keep reading this story, particularly about what it's like to be a werewolf, from the werewolf's point of view which isn't something we get to see in the books. You've done a great job at introducing the plot what with all this suspense and the emotions - it starts out really intense and I like that.

If you don't mind some CC: In the dream in the beginning, I think it got a little wordy. (The rest is fine, I only noticed it in that paragraph). For example this phrase: her knee bleeding with searing pain shooting through it
I don't think you need to say both "searing" and "shooting" as they're quite similar anyway, and there's a lot of "ing" words in that sentence. Personally I'd reword it to something like "her knee bleeding as pain seared through it".

I think I've rambled a bit in this review, so I'm sorry :P Anyway, great job, I really enjoyed this chapter! And feel free to re-request :)

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing.

I am pleased you think I did fine with Dom's emotions and reactions. Haha she wouldn't have liked a hug, definitely xP

I was a little hesitant about the Remus mention at first but I am glad you liked it. Indeed, it's always scary and dangerous to be a werwolf, wolfsbane or no wolfsbane, especially for Dom right now.

Haha well they couldn't really see their daughter in such a state and had to 'run out' but everything will be alright soon with them =) And yeah they do understand her need to be alone as well.

I am thrilled to hear that you are interested in reading the story further. I am trying to do something like this for the first time, so I am not sure if I'll be able to explore the whole werewolf thing properly or not, but I'll surely give it my best shot. Your words mean a lot to me =)

I am thankful for the CC. I'll definitely go back and edit as soon as i get the time. Don't worry about the rambling, I love reading long reviews. I'll definitely re-request, thanks!


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